Liam

Can confirm, this is me. I'll be using the Florrie account now - less hypothetical confusion between Liams, and I don't now go by Liam anyways.

Dragon Quest has become nightmare fuel https://youtu.be/xCQ-KHtlpOk?t=42m

I'm a nitpick on grammar and tiny details, so.. here we go.. Intro "Long ago, in the land of Lotaga, 4 strong kingdoms existed." –– I'd probably use "four" instead of "4" there. "Tangtl" –– is that its actual name or a typo? "..offered him many powerful armours.." –– thank goodness for remembering to not use "armors" "Geldos met it's end." –– should be "its". "[Name] wake up your friend is here to play!" –– I think there should probably be more punctuation in this sentence. "Now remember no going down the Well." –– Is "Well" intentionally capitalized? Also, there should probably be more punctuation - maybe "Now remember, no going down the Well." "Also be careful around the horse." –– Maybe a comma after "also"? "Follow me to the Horse stable!" –– Should it be capitalized as "Horse Stable"? Or, if we only capitalize "Horse", "be careful around the horse" should probably be "be careful around the Horse". I think it'd be better to capitalize place names, though, and maybe monster names (ex. "Hey, look - this Cureslime is huge!"). "So, I read this book about a golden slime" –– Consider capitalizing "slime" here. You might think about capitalizing "golden", as well (i.e. "Golden Slime") if Golden Slimes are actual monsters - keep it lowercase if it's just an adjective describing a "Slime" though. "Great we can meet back here later tonight!" –– There should definitely be a comma after "great". "Then make our way down the well!" –– Should "well" be capitalized, since it was earlier? (You used "the well" instead of "the Well" a couple dialog texts previously, too - I just forgot to take note). A comma should be after "then" here too. ..In fact, I'd rewrite this whole dialog box as "Ava: Great, we can meet back here later tonight, then make our way down the well." ..or maybe.. "Ava: Great, we can meet back here later tonight! Then we'll make our way down the well." "..lets go around the village!" –– Missing apostrophe in "lets". (In inn) "Back again? Leave me alone please!" –– Should there be a comma after "alone" here? (I'm not really sure!) "Oh hush Aru! My brother is so annoying." –– Ara first talks to Aru ("Oh hush Aru!"), then changes to talk to the player ("My brother is so annoying."). Maybe there should be a pause and/or line break between the two sentences, to make it clearer that she's, like, turning around towards you, or changing her focus? "You know Batas & Tega?" –– First, ampersands - are those ever better than just "and"? – Also, should this be "You know, Batas and Tega?", with a comma after "know"? "Our fathers are so neat huh [name]!" –– A question mark could also work here, but it might be better to keep as an exclamation mark. Also, it might be best to have some commas: "..are so neat, huh, [name]!" (Town guard) "Don't worry in a few years(..)" –– There should be a comma after "Don't worry" (i.e. "Don't worry, in a few years(..)"). "I think it's getting late [name] maybe we should go home and rest a little." –– this should probably have more punctuation, maybe something like this: "I think it's getting late, [name]. Maybe we should go home and rest a little." General "[Name] peered into the vase..."; "There are no books that pique [name]'s interest." –– pick a tense! - usually present tense works best, ex. "[Name] peers into the vase"/"[Name] obtains the item"/"Ew! The yucky goo poisons [name]." "[Name] peered into the vase..."; "Found a Herb." –– I wonder if this is a bit weird? We go "[Name] [verb]" ("[Name] peered") in the first sentence, but just "[verb]" in the second ("found"). I like DQ-DS's translations, because they read nicer, imo: "What luck! A medicinal herb."; "[Name] obtains the medicinal herb." "Found 5G" –– there should definitely be a period after this! Technical stuff "[Character] joins the party!" –– in most DQ games I've played, the music plays while this dialog box is displayed, not after. Or maybe it was different in old DQ games? - Menu interaction –– you're probably just going with how RPGMaker works by default, but I think that in all the DQ games, when you press right from the rightmost column in a grid-style menu (ex. the "item", "cast", "eqpt" menu) it goes to the leftmost column of the current row, not the next row down. To clarify, your menu currently behaves like this: ..but in Dragon Quest, it behaves like this: Additionally, in DQ, you can jump from the bottom of a menu to the top, and from the top to the bottom, by pressing the respective arrow key – ex. when you're on the bottom row, pressing down will take you straight to the top row, same column (and vice versa for the top side). This only seems to be a problem for the grid menu, not list menus (in list menus you can already get to the start by pressing down while on the last item). - I found that a few times I accidentally skipped threw a dialog box because I wasn't sure there was going to be another dialog box. That's because sometimes you have a blank pause between dialog boxes - and I mean blank, there's no dialog box visible at that point, it just looks like you can walk around the map again, when really you're still in a conversation. I'm not sure what the best solution is, though. Getting rid of the blank pauses would fix the issue, but often those blanks work well, aside from the issue I just described that inherently comes with making it look like the player can walk around the map when really they're in a discussion. ..okay, I'm lazy, this is all I've got.

Eh? I never sent you happy birthday wishes! I'm kidding, of course. Happy belated birthday!

That's amazing in every way! This looks to be missing a quotation mark or two, though:

DQ9's class system is nice but once you've gotten your character super strong (natural traits across multiple classes..) you just can't go back to fighting anything but the hardest grottoes, which is a bit of a downside. Perhaps half the power of natural traits if you're not in the class it came with? That way there's still a point to getting them, but they don't combine to make something quite as crazy. DQ9 has just the right amount of classes - not too many, not too few - and unlocking them via quests (usually with prerequisites) was good, in my opinion.

You had me at this. IV was always my favorite DQ/DW game, but the localization for the DS and mobile remakes was awful, mostly due to the phonetically written accents, which you then had to take time to translate in your mind to make any sense of what any of the NPCs (and in the mobile verison some of the characters) were trying to say. Thanks so much. Looking forward to trying this on my next play-through! Actually that's one of my favorite things about DQ4 (and further), but opinions vary Updating everything to have the same (or similar) strings as DW4 is really cool, though.

Wow, that's really cool. Nice job!

Out of curiosity's sake, what actually changed? What game breaking bugs/missing text have you fixed?